My name is Yang Xizhou. I’m a Chinese boy. I am thirteen. This is a picture of my family at home. It’s an old photo of my family. You can see my father, my mother, my sister and I. We all look young because we take① it five years ago. I was eight years old that year.
　　My mother likes flowers very much. You can see many flowers in the picture. They are very nice. My father likes sports. So he looks very healthy, isn’t② he? My sister likes playing the piano. But I like reading English books and newspapers. So I do well in English. This is my family.
　　分析点评：
　　这篇习作虽短，但内容丰富。全文围绕家庭照来写，从这张旧照片上可以看到这是一个幸福、和睦的家庭。文章不落俗套，构思新颖。但也有不足之处：
　　①句子应是一般过去时态，所以，take应改为took。
　　②此句话运用了一般现在时态第三人称单数含实义动词的反意疑问句，所以isn’t应改为doesn’t。
　　改正：
　　A Picture of My Family
　　My name is Yang Xizhou. I’m a Chinese boy. I am thirteen. This is a picture of my family at home. It’s an old photo of my family. You can see my father, my mother, my sister and I. We all look young because we took it five years ago. I was eight years old that year.
　　My mother likes flowers very much. You can see many flowers in the picture. They are very nice. My father likes sports. So he looks very healthy, doesn’t he? My sister likes playing the piano. But I like reading English books and newspapers. So I do well in English. This is my family.
　　（指导老师：赵梅花）