病症不善于选择恰当的记叙顺序,导致行文平淡,影响表达效果。病文亮相站台上的身影湖南益阳市二中张思川那年我十五岁,我怀着满腔的思念去探望爸爸。一下火车,我就拼命地搜索父亲的身影,那个让我日思夜念的身影。我知道,站台里最高大的身影一定是我父亲的。可是我没有找到父亲,最后我不得不自己提着沉重的行李去他住的地方。 Ill-suited to choose the appropriate narrative sequence, leading to plain language, affect the expression effect. Text appeared on the platform of the text Hunan Yiyang City, Zhang Sicheng II That year I was 15 years old, I filled with thoughts to visit my father. About the train, I desperately search for his father’s figure, that day I think the night thinking of the figure. I know that the highest figure on the platform must be my father’s. But I did not find my father, and finally I had to carry my heavy luggage to where he lives.