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[试题呈现]
假设你的名字叫李华，今年18岁，想利用暑假打工，你在报纸上看到了某咖啡厅的招聘广告。请根据报纸内容写一封120～150字的求职信。
注意：1. 框内为李华个人的相关信息；
2. 信的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数。
[谋篇布局]
求职信属于公务信函，其目的在于让聘用方了解自己的经验、能力、成就以及愿望等，所以对个人情况的介绍应该是求职信的核心内容。应尽可能向对方说明本人的长处，以便留下好印象，获得面谈的机会。
求职信一般包括以下几个方面的内容：
首先阐述清楚招聘信息的来源，以及所申请的具体职位；
其次简述个人信息；然后进一步强调自己的能力，表达抱负；
最后提出自己的希望，希望得到面试的机会。
求职信的语言属于正式用语，在写作过程中一定要注意用词简洁、准确，语气礼貌、自信，态度不卑不亢，所给信息具有充分的可信度。尤其是在强调自身经历和优点的时候，更应把握尺度。
[常用表达]
开头常用句式
I am writing in response to your advertisement in ...
I would like to apply the vacancy of ...
I am writing this letter to submit my application for ...
I write this letter to apply for the position that you have advertised in ...
I am writing to express my interest in your advertised position for ...
In reply to your advertisement in ... I beg to apply for the post of ... in your company.
Your advertised position of ... interests me ...
I am writing this letter to recommend myself as a qualified candidate for the job of ... you have advertised on ...
结尾段常用句式
I would be most grateful if you grant me a personal interview.
Any favorable consideration of my application will be highly appreciated.
Your prompt response will be much appreciated.
I should be pleased to attend for an interview at your convenience， when I could give you further details concerning myself.
Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to hearing form you.
I hope I may be granted an interview， when I can explain my qualifications more fully.
其他常用句式
The main reason for my confidence in this position lies in ...
I graduated from ... majoring in ... I have been working in ... since my graduation， and I have therefore attained a fair knowledge and experience in this field.
I have much spare time this semester， which can ensure my time commitment for the job.
The kind of work in which your company is engaged particularly interests me.
I feel I have the necessary qualifications and experience needed for the position for ... advertised in the newspaper.
It seems to me that my working experience， together with my education background， has given me an ideal preparation to assume the role of ... in a firm such as yours.
Please find more details in my enclosed resume. [参考模板]
写作“三步走”：
自我介绍，说明求职目的；
展示个人能力、经历及求职动机；
希望得到面试机会、表达感谢。
Dear Sir or Madam，
I write this letter to apply for the position that you have advertised in _____________ （消息来源） of _____________________ （广告发布时间）/In reply to your advertisement on _____________________， I’m writing to apply to be ______________________.
I’m ________________ from _______________. As a/an _____________， I have been _____________.Besides， I won ______________ in ______________. If you consider me appropriate for the job， please call me at ____________________.
I would appreciate it very much if you could give me an early reply./Thank you for considering my application， and I am looking forward to meeting you.
Yours sincerely，
Li Ming
习作Ⅰ
Dear sir，
I would like to apply for the position of a part-time waiter， as was advertised in the newspaper.
To briefly introduce myself， I， an eighteen-year-old boy， who saw the wanted you advertised in the newspaper， want to inform you of my advantages. Years of school life have equipped me with excellent communicating skills， which can be of great help to work in the café. Due to the vacation， I have available and adequate time during the week. Furthermore， I have ever worked three months in fast food restaurant， which can cast light on my ability quite well. In addition， I will look as well as I can， dress becomingly， talk low， act good， criticize not one bit to regulate myself.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
点评 这是一篇中等习作。其优点是：
1. 层次分明，结构清晰，三段各有侧重点，要点齐全。语气诚恳，不卑不亢。
2. 有一定的词汇积累，部分表达选词恰当且高级，如：inform you of my advantages， equip me with excellent communicating skills， be of great help to。
不足之处在于：
在信息来源的表述上第一段和第二段有重复。
有一定数量的中式英语表达，不符合英文表达逻辑与习惯。如第二段的最后一句话可修改为In addition， I will dress appropriately and behave politely to be a qualified waiter。
作者尝试了亮点表达，但存在个别选词错误与搭配不当。如：在表达“有时间”时，I have available time应改为I am available；cast light on意为“阐明”，用在my ability上很生硬，根据表达需要可修改为 ...which can indicate my experience accumulation and qualification；在副词修饰动词方面，没有becomingly这个词；talk low可修改为talk gently；act good可修改为behave politely。
习作Ⅱ
Dear sir，
I would like to apply for the position of a part-time waiter， as was advertised in the newspaper. My name is Li Hua， a student of 18 years old. Young as I am， I have confidence in myself. Possessed of enormous enthusiasm and determination， I will definitely live up to your expectation. Listed below are my qualifications for the job. First， It is convenient for me to work in the busy city center café as my home is not far away and I can see to it that I am available during the whole summer vacation. Besides， knowing that enjoying working with people is what it takes to be a waitress in your café， I can meet this demand as I am a friendly and helpful person. What’s more， the previous three months working experience in the KFC is where I am at an advantage， that is to say， I am experienced and know how to attend to sudden circumstances flexibly.
In a word， I guarantee that I am qualified for the job and I will try my best to work if I am employed. I hope I can meet with your approval and hear from you soon.
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
点评 这是一篇高档习作。
1. 段落清晰，层次分明。有过渡衔接词besides， what’s more， in a word，也有过渡衔接句Listed below are my qualifications for the job.
2. 高级词汇运用自如，作者语用输出能力强。在词方面，通过丰富的形容词和副词使表达更形象，如enormous， definitely， available， previous， flexibly， guarantee。在短语方面，动词和介词短语交叉使用，如be possessed of， live up to one’s expectation， it is convenient for me to， at an advantage， attend to sudden circumstances， be qualified for， meet with your approval。
3. 句式结构丰富多样，长短句并存。在文章第一段，作者就分别用了as引导的非限定性定语从句和as引导的让步状语从句。此外，我们还可以欣赏到下列高级句式：
Possessed of enormous enthusiasm and determination， I will definitely live up to your expectation. （过去分词作状语）
Listed below are my qualifications for the job. （系表结构的完全倒装）
Knowing that enjoying working with people is what it takes to be a waitress in your café， I can meet this demand as I am a friendly and helpful person. （现在分词作状语+what引导的表语从句）
... the previous three months working experience in the KFC is where I am at an advantage. （where引导的表语从句）
假设你的名字叫李华，今年18岁，想利用暑假打工，你在报纸上看到了某咖啡厅的招聘广告。请根据报纸内容写一封120～150字的求职信。
注意：1. 框内为李华个人的相关信息；
2. 信的开头已为你写好，不计入总词数。
[谋篇布局]
求职信属于公务信函，其目的在于让聘用方了解自己的经验、能力、成就以及愿望等，所以对个人情况的介绍应该是求职信的核心内容。应尽可能向对方说明本人的长处，以便留下好印象，获得面谈的机会。
求职信一般包括以下几个方面的内容：
首先阐述清楚招聘信息的来源，以及所申请的具体职位；
其次简述个人信息；然后进一步强调自己的能力，表达抱负；
最后提出自己的希望，希望得到面试的机会。
求职信的语言属于正式用语，在写作过程中一定要注意用词简洁、准确，语气礼貌、自信，态度不卑不亢，所给信息具有充分的可信度。尤其是在强调自身经历和优点的时候，更应把握尺度。
[常用表达]
开头常用句式
I am writing in response to your advertisement in ...
I would like to apply the vacancy of ...
I am writing this letter to submit my application for ...
I write this letter to apply for the position that you have advertised in ...
I am writing to express my interest in your advertised position for ...
In reply to your advertisement in ... I beg to apply for the post of ... in your company.
Your advertised position of ... interests me ...
I am writing this letter to recommend myself as a qualified candidate for the job of ... you have advertised on ...
结尾段常用句式
I would be most grateful if you grant me a personal interview.
Any favorable consideration of my application will be highly appreciated.
Your prompt response will be much appreciated.
I should be pleased to attend for an interview at your convenience， when I could give you further details concerning myself.
Thank you for considering my application and I am looking forward to hearing form you.
I hope I may be granted an interview， when I can explain my qualifications more fully.
其他常用句式
The main reason for my confidence in this position lies in ...
I graduated from ... majoring in ... I have been working in ... since my graduation， and I have therefore attained a fair knowledge and experience in this field.
I have much spare time this semester， which can ensure my time commitment for the job.
The kind of work in which your company is engaged particularly interests me.
I feel I have the necessary qualifications and experience needed for the position for ... advertised in the newspaper.
It seems to me that my working experience， together with my education background， has given me an ideal preparation to assume the role of ... in a firm such as yours.
Please find more details in my enclosed resume. [参考模板]
写作“三步走”：
自我介绍，说明求职目的；
展示个人能力、经历及求职动机；
希望得到面试机会、表达感谢。
Dear Sir or Madam，
I write this letter to apply for the position that you have advertised in _____________ （消息来源） of _____________________ （广告发布时间）/In reply to your advertisement on _____________________， I’m writing to apply to be ______________________.
I’m ________________ from _______________. As a/an _____________， I have been _____________.Besides， I won ______________ in ______________. If you consider me appropriate for the job， please call me at ____________________.
I would appreciate it very much if you could give me an early reply./Thank you for considering my application， and I am looking forward to meeting you.
Yours sincerely，
Li Ming
习作Ⅰ
Dear sir，
I would like to apply for the position of a part-time waiter， as was advertised in the newspaper.
To briefly introduce myself， I， an eighteen-year-old boy， who saw the wanted you advertised in the newspaper， want to inform you of my advantages. Years of school life have equipped me with excellent communicating skills， which can be of great help to work in the café. Due to the vacation， I have available and adequate time during the week. Furthermore， I have ever worked three months in fast food restaurant， which can cast light on my ability quite well. In addition， I will look as well as I can， dress becomingly， talk low， act good， criticize not one bit to regulate myself.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
点评 这是一篇中等习作。其优点是：
1. 层次分明，结构清晰，三段各有侧重点，要点齐全。语气诚恳，不卑不亢。
2. 有一定的词汇积累，部分表达选词恰当且高级，如：inform you of my advantages， equip me with excellent communicating skills， be of great help to。
不足之处在于：
在信息来源的表述上第一段和第二段有重复。
有一定数量的中式英语表达，不符合英文表达逻辑与习惯。如第二段的最后一句话可修改为In addition， I will dress appropriately and behave politely to be a qualified waiter。
作者尝试了亮点表达，但存在个别选词错误与搭配不当。如：在表达“有时间”时，I have available time应改为I am available；cast light on意为“阐明”，用在my ability上很生硬，根据表达需要可修改为 ...which can indicate my experience accumulation and qualification；在副词修饰动词方面，没有becomingly这个词；talk low可修改为talk gently；act good可修改为behave politely。
习作Ⅱ
Dear sir，
I would like to apply for the position of a part-time waiter， as was advertised in the newspaper. My name is Li Hua， a student of 18 years old. Young as I am， I have confidence in myself. Possessed of enormous enthusiasm and determination， I will definitely live up to your expectation. Listed below are my qualifications for the job. First， It is convenient for me to work in the busy city center café as my home is not far away and I can see to it that I am available during the whole summer vacation. Besides， knowing that enjoying working with people is what it takes to be a waitress in your café， I can meet this demand as I am a friendly and helpful person. What’s more， the previous three months working experience in the KFC is where I am at an advantage， that is to say， I am experienced and know how to attend to sudden circumstances flexibly.
In a word， I guarantee that I am qualified for the job and I will try my best to work if I am employed. I hope I can meet with your approval and hear from you soon.
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua
点评 这是一篇高档习作。
1. 段落清晰，层次分明。有过渡衔接词besides， what’s more， in a word，也有过渡衔接句Listed below are my qualifications for the job.
2. 高级词汇运用自如，作者语用输出能力强。在词方面，通过丰富的形容词和副词使表达更形象，如enormous， definitely， available， previous， flexibly， guarantee。在短语方面，动词和介词短语交叉使用，如be possessed of， live up to one’s expectation， it is convenient for me to， at an advantage， attend to sudden circumstances， be qualified for， meet with your approval。
3. 句式结构丰富多样，长短句并存。在文章第一段，作者就分别用了as引导的非限定性定语从句和as引导的让步状语从句。此外，我们还可以欣赏到下列高级句式：
Possessed of enormous enthusiasm and determination， I will definitely live up to your expectation. （过去分词作状语）
Listed below are my qualifications for the job. （系表结构的完全倒装）
Knowing that enjoying working with people is what it takes to be a waitress in your café， I can meet this demand as I am a friendly and helpful person. （现在分词作状语+what引导的表语从句）
... the previous three months working experience in the KFC is where I am at an advantage. （where引导的表语从句）