此文有两笔出彩:其一是“我弄痛了你……可你没有咬我”——显示“花花”与“我”感情相通;其二是“再到我上晚自习回来”——显示“我”牵挂之深。但是,此文在写小狗时,仍有“大路货”的笔墨——“抓到了一只小老鼠”和“跟着车跑”。升格的途径是,用超常举动的细节替换一般化的细节。此文标题,宜更名为“花花”。 There are two highlights in this article: The first is “I’ve hurt you... But you didn’t bite me” - shows the “flower” and “I” feelings connected; the second is “I come back to the last night of self-study” - - Shows the depth of “I” concern. However, when writing puppies, this article still has the “Dai Lun” ink - “catch a mouse” and “run with the car.” The way to upgrade is to replace generalized details with details of extraordinary actions. The title of this article should be renamed “Flowers.”