My favorite animal is lions. They’re usually live in steppe （干草原） of Africa or India. They only eat meat， so they kill other animals for eat them. They often fight with each other， they’re rude for sure. But they’re good parents. Fathers are strict with child and mothers are always gentle. When they are little， they’re playful and cute， when they’re little， they’re two years-old. They are powerful and beautiful.
　　Some people think the lions are cruel. But， I mean， aren’t we cruel？ People always kill them for their good coat or meat！ How much cruel we are！ We should give them safety.
　　蔣 烨老师点评：
　　作者的思维活跃，行文流畅，观点新颖。在谈论最喜欢的动物时，她不仅从动物的栖息地、生活习惯、成长经历进行描述，还对动物作了自己独特的评价。在结尾处，作者提出了保护动物的倡议。文章的句式丰富，结构清晰，但仍然存在少量的语法错误，如时态的使用、单复数变化等。
　　My favorite animal is a lion. They usually live in steppe of Africa or India. They only eat meat， so they kill other animals for food. They often fight with each other. They’re rude for sure， but they’re good parents. The lion fathers are strict with their children while the mothers are always gentle. When lions are little， they’re playful and cute. After they’re two years old， they become powerful and beautiful.
　　Some people think lions are cruel， but I don’t think so. I mean， aren’t we cruel？ People always kill them for their good coats or meat！ How cruel we are！ We should save animals and protect them to give them safety.