《与朱元思书》一文,细腻而生动地描写了浙江省富春江自富阳到桐庐一段沿岸百里的秀丽风光,“给人以美的感受”,但认真琢磨,这块“白璧”仍有“微瑕”,在于结构不照应。 正如课本“自读提示”所分析的:“作者描绘富春江山水的奇丽多姿,极有层次:第一段总写富春江山水之美,概括为‘奇山异水,天下独绝’八字;第二段承‘异水’二字,抓住‘清’和‘急’的特点,具体生动地描绘;第三段承‘奇山’二字,通过景物描绘,多层次多角度地展示富春江两岸群山之美。”既然“第一段……概括为‘奇山异水,天下独绝’八字”,那么第二段就应先紧承“奇山”二 “A book with Zhu Yuansi” describes the beautiful scenery of Fuchun River in Zhejiang Province from Fuyang to Tonglu along the coast. It gives “a feeling of beauty”, but it is seriously studied. This “white pagoda” still has “ ”Slight ignorance" lies in the fact that the structure does not respond. As the textbook “Self-reading Tips” analyzes, “The author describes the wonderful landscape of the Fuchun River, which is extremely varied: The first paragraph always writes about the beauty of the Fuchun River landscape, which is summarized as the “October Mountain is different from the water and the world is unique” character. The second paragraph inherits the word ’dissimilar water’, and captures the characteristics of ’clear’ and ’emergency’ and describes it in a vivid and vivid manner. The third paragraph bears the word ’qishan’ and is depicted through scenery and displayed in multiple levels and from multiple angles. The beauty of the mountains on both sides of the Fuchun River.” Since “the first paragraph...is summed up as ’October Mountain is different from the water, and the world is unique in the ’eight characters’”, then the second paragraph should be followed closely by the “Extreme Mountain” II.