Today my English teacher， Ms. Yi， asks me to go to her office. I don’t know what is happening.
　　“Your fairy tale is published in Junior School Student，” she says and gives me a colorful magazine. I am very happy.
　　“When did you start write① fairy tales？” Ms. Yi asks.
　　“Grade Five，” I say to her， “I like writing fairy tales， and I often write in my diary.”
　　“I want to read your old diaries. How many diaries do you have now？” she asks me.
　　“I have three notebooks now. I will give you next Monday，” I say to her proudly.
　　“Wonderful. I will read your fairy tales one by one carefully. I really like your fairy tales.” Ms. Yi smiles.
　　“Really？ I will write more. Thanks for your encourage②.”
　　When I go back to classroom， my classmates are anxious to look through the magazine Junior School Student. How happy I am！
　　湖南省永州市冷水滩区竹山桥学校七（62）班 秦晓兰
　　1. 优点：
　　文章采用师生对话的形式行文。对话生动有趣，记录生活中的点点滴滴。小作者在与老师的对话中表达出对写童话故事的喜爱。全文自然流畅，真实生动，是一篇不错的学生习作。
　　2. 需要修改的地方：
　　① start write为start to write或start writing。start后面接不定式或者动词的-ing形式；
　　② encourage改为encouragement。encourage 为动词，encouragement为名词。
　　3. 评分：
　　按湖南省永州市中考英语作文满分15分的评分标准，本文修改前可得13分。