失误原因:情节虚假题目:爸爸,我为你自豪王天宇爸爸,在我心中一直是伟大、勇敢的代名词。在我心中,尽管爸爸四十有几,显得有些过于成熟,但依然身强体壮,能做许多别人做不到的事情。①开头语句模棱两可,不知所云,父亲的外貌描写过于简单。一天深夜,我们一家人正在熟睡当中,一声尖叫打破了这原有的宁静,随即传了一声:“有人偷东西了呀!”爸爸也因这一声被惊醒,我随即起了床,只见爸爸在急匆匆地穿鞋。我还没弄清楚怎么回 Mistakes: Pseudo-plot topic: Dad, I’m proud of you Wang Tianyu’s dad has always been a great, brave synonym in my heart. In my heart, even though my father is a little overdone and looks a little too mature, he is still strong and able to do many things that others cannot. 1 At the beginning of the sentence, ambiguous, incomprehensible, father’s appearance description is too simple. Late one night, our family was asleep and a scream shattered the original silence. Then we heard a whisper: “Somebody stole something!” "My dad was awakened because of this, and I immediately got up. I saw my dad wearing shoes in a hurry. I haven’t figured out how to go back